I can't write for s**t, technical reports yes, adverts no.. You should see my eBay items.. Lol. Worrying thing is I write sponsorship proposals and am bloody good at them.. But adverts.. Not So much l
It's not hard to be honest. Anyone can do it, its just laziness. Call it whatever you like but thats my opinion, if you can write posts on here that are readable you can write a car advert. Especially if you are a car enthusiast!!
Did you look through other adverts before writing it? Copy bits you like the look of. If when you are look at cars you see some info and you think ahh.. thats a good to know, add that sort of information in your own adverts.
And another thing is photos, photos and more photos. When I was selling my S4 I took 30+ photos, uploaded them all to photo bucket and linked them in my PH advert!
You have to understand some people are willing to travel for a car but do not want to waste there time, one mans good condition isn't another. The good thing with photos is they can see for themselves the condition.
Back to my S4, I had 1 phone call about it, it was advertised at what was a strong price. His first words were wow, the description means I don't really have any questions for you, other than when can I come and see it and are you open to offers. (he explained he was travelling far and wanted to know where he stood before he left) I said I might chuck you in a full tank of juice to get you home. He was happy with that came, viewed the car, paid in full and left!
You have to show you put effort in you are expecting someone to part with £6000 and that first description looked like you had spent about 2 minutes throwing it togeather. If that is all the time you can spare to advertise something worth that much, it would lead me to believe you don't care about your car.
Which one are you more likely to call:
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http://www.pistonheads.com/sales/3428360.htm
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http://www.pistonheads.com/sales/3465638.htm