Hell of a lot better than most! Maybe rambles on a bit but it certainly wouldn't put me off. Also worth checking for the spelling mistakes, a brief read through and I caught 2.
complete with lift time guarantee
Folder of compressive receipts and history
Maybe put down the mileage of the services instead of the parts about being owned by a Renault Mechanic. So like:
DD/MM/YY X,XXX - Oil, Filter, etc etc Change
DD/MM/YY XX,XXX - Oil etc etc
DD/MM/YY XX,XXX - Cambelt Change @ Renault DealerName
And so on and so forth. Also I wouldn't include "Car is located adjacent the Celtic Manor Hotel, Newport S.Wales". Might be stupid of me to think it but gives the exact location of the car if somebody wanted to steal it.
Edit: I also really want a re-trimmed steering wheel. They do look exactly 1 million times better.