Flyer Feedback

[spirez]

Hi guys, having a crack at photoshop to make a few flyers for my gym. Just after some feedback on this if you could be so kind!

I thought it may have too much text but don't really know how I can get my point across with any less.

I don't know why it uploaded so small. The source file is 1.1 mb.

Cheers

 

[Rob]

I likt it all apart from the grey box with the text in it. It just doesn't work.

 

[Gally]

It's not bad, maybe some spacing inbetween the paragraphs.

Looks a little cluttered.

 

[TheEvilGiraffe]

Waaaaaaay too much waffle. I got bored before the white box.

Keep it simple ! Straight to the point. Interesting, informative and easy to absorb.

Also - is this in your garage ? Why is there only a mobile number ?

/miserableclunge

Good luck !!!

 

[TheEvilGiraffe]

What about a 2 sided flyer ?

Simple info on one side, waffle on the other if the viewer is still interested...

 

[jam.]

About 50% too much text imo. You might read that if you were handed it, or received it through your door; but the vast majority of people will just see a wall of text and not bother reading it. Lazy, but true.

Try with just the bullet-pointed text and any other crucial (contact info, offer, etc) text and it'll probably be a fair bit better.

I'd have a bash at it, but I'm on my iPhone.

 

[spirez]

Cheers guys, I;ve upped another one. It's better but is it enough? I've tried to add in some emotional attachement too i.e. feel more energised etc

Thoughts?

 

[TheEvilGiraffe]

I'm very tired, and very childish, and also an idiot... I read "EskimoFit" and started laughing.

Once I read the rest, all I can think of whilst reading (NB: the above) is the wacky waving inflatable arm sketch from Family Guy.

Sorry !

 

[doccrx]

I'm very tired, and very childish, and also an idiot... I read "EskimoFit" and started laughing.

Once I read the rest, all I can think of whilst reading (NB: the above) is the wacky waving inflatable arm sketch from Family Guy.

Sorry !

PMSL, I'm sure there's a "how to do flyers" on the Youtube.

 

[Wick]

Both a bit on the wordy side for my liking.... Not a bad effort on the flyer though!

 

[Derelict-UK]

prices might be a good idea?

 

[Dweeb]

instead of saying lower back pain you could use 'aches and pains' or whatever, would be more general...

 

[JJ!]

I think if you call it 5 ways, you need to have 5 ways of reaching your goals - just makes the name have more sense IMO!

 

[Christopher]

Believe me, I've seen worse.

 

[spirez]

Cheers guys, I've gone with this for now, front & back

Will work on refining it but to be honest I just wanted to get something done and out there instead of farting around trying to get it perfect. Will definitely work on making it better though!

JJ I'm starting to do that on my blog. Five Ways to get stronger/improve your diet etc etc

Five ways means quite a lot as it's the area where the gym is, so it works both ways which is quite good.

EstimaFit is the name of the gym I work out of and FWF is my own company. But I basically market both.

 

[DB.]

As if this is in Birmingham. My mate lived on Bath row. Im in harborne.

Never seen this place before Prices? Any more info?

I wouldn't leave my gym, but wouldn't mind trying it out.